Comments on: A Courtesan’s Last http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/ Simple Thoughts, Simple Words Tue, 24 Jan 2012 13:27:49 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.1 By: Ganaesh http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/comment-page-1/#comment-2586 Ganaesh Sat, 25 Aug 2007 09:55:01 +0000 http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/#comment-2586 And the mood of the ending was alright. Felt like there was a natural progression of the story. This one feels... incomplete. Like it was chopped up before it could resolve itself. But maybe I feel that way because I read the earlier one, and I seem to favour that. Heh. And the mood of the ending was alright. Felt like there was a natural progression of the story. This one feels… incomplete. Like it was chopped up before it could resolve itself. But maybe I feel that way because I read the earlier one, and I seem to favour that. Heh.

]]> By: Ganaesh http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/comment-page-1/#comment-2585 Ganaesh Sat, 25 Aug 2007 09:52:22 +0000 http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/#comment-2585 Dude, looks like the lines are still there. Couldn't think up of better ones, eh? <strong>Silencers: Haha, no. I guess I'll just leave it that way. I probably won't attempt that style again, though.</strong> Dude, looks like the lines are still there. Couldn’t think up of better ones, eh?

Silencers: Haha, no. I guess I’ll just leave it that way. I probably won’t attempt that style again, though.

]]> By: bodicea http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/comment-page-1/#comment-2584 bodicea Wed, 22 Aug 2007 04:55:37 +0000 http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/#comment-2584 i notice you edited the last bit ;) <strong>Silencers: I thought I'd change the ending mood a little bit :)</strong> i notice you edited the last bit ;)

Silencers: I thought I’d change the ending mood a little bit :)

]]> By: bodicea http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/comment-page-1/#comment-2583 bodicea Wed, 22 Aug 2007 04:52:51 +0000 http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/#comment-2583 the line between expression and description is rather vague. the key is to show a lot more than tell. write as if you're living it. the line between expression and description is rather vague. the key is to show a lot more than tell.

write as if you’re living it.

]]> By: Hikaryu http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/comment-page-1/#comment-2582 Hikaryu Tue, 21 Aug 2007 15:11:06 +0000 http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/#comment-2582 Magnificent. Magnificent.

]]> By: bodicea http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/comment-page-1/#comment-2581 bodicea Tue, 21 Aug 2007 14:23:46 +0000 http://www.thesilentroom.com/2007/08/21/the-courtesans-last/#comment-2581 nice twist. though overall the story could have been more detailed, yet succinct. <strong>Silencers: I have a bit of trouble when I try to tread the line between expressive and descriptive writing. This is my first attempt at sensual literature, actually.</strong> nice twist. though overall the story could have been more detailed, yet succinct.

Silencers: I have a bit of trouble when I try to tread the line between expressive and descriptive writing. This is my first attempt at sensual literature, actually.

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